Monday, July 09, 2007

A little research help? (paca)

A former classmate and I are designing some materials for research. I have written up a few test sentences that we are trying to get very informal feedback on before we create the real first draft. I was wondering if any of the readers here would like to participate in giving their opinion. You can be a speaker of any language, but if you respond and you learned any language other than English first, please let me know in the comment. I unfortunately can only tell you what I am testing after I get your feedback. Interested? Here's the task:

Below are five sentences. Read the first one silently to yourself. Do not read it aloud. As you read it to yourself, listen to the way it sounds in your mind. Do any of the words sound louder or longer or just bigger or more prominent to you? Also, do you seem to break the sentence up into smaller phrases of any sort when reading to yourself? I want you to tell me which words are bigger and where the phrases are, if any. The best way to do this is to retype the sentence (or copy and paste it) into the comment, and then modify it so that the big words are now ALL CAPS and a couple slashes (//) are added in between words to indicate where the phrases begin and end. Here is an example:

Given Sentence) Paca asked me to do this silly language experiment on his blog.

Modified Sentence) PACA asked me to do this // silly LANGUAGE experiment // on his BLOG.

When modifying, do your best to just judge how things sound in the mind. Do not attempt to come up with some way that it should be, based upon previous education. Just, how does it "sound" when you read?

The easiest way to do this might be to simply copy the five sentences below. (Edit menu, copy, or control-C) Then go to the comments page and Paste them in to your new comment. (Edit menu, paste, or control-V). Only read one sentence and provide an answer before reading the next sentence. For me, it seems best to read it just a couple times and not worry about each one or too long. The longer I take, the more peculiar my answers become. But of course, take as much time as you need. Finally, please, please, please do your best NOT to read any other responses until after you have submitted your answer. The more one response influences another, the less useful this becomes. Once you have hit submit on the Comment, please feel free to read and analyze and debate to your hearts content. OK, ready? Get set, go!

Five sentences:

1) And then, striking the edge of the grand circle, he disappeared headfirst towards the stalls below.

2) Her first thought, curiously, was of Auden's poem on the fall of Icarus.

3) Gabe walked quickly towards Jen's diner hoping to see her serving the last cup of coffee to the last customer.

4) As he passed under the flashing neon sign of Victor Coronelli's bar, he saw that the diner's overheads were off and there was not a soul in sight.

5) Gabe's disappointment turned to alarm when he noticed a gaping hole in the window that normally read "Old Time Food" and then heard a whimpering deep inside the kitchen.

4 comments:

Llama said...

1) And THEN, // STRIKING the edge of the GRAND circle, // he disappeared HEADFIRST // towards the stalls below.
2) Her first thought, // curiously, // was of AUDEN's poem on the FALL of ICARUS.
3) GABE walked quickly towards JEN's diner // hoping to see her serving the last cup of coffee // to the last customer.
4) As he PASSED under the flashing neon sign of VICTOR CORONELLI's bar, // he saw that the DINER'S OVERHEADS were off // and there was not a SOUL in sight.
5) GABE's DISAPPOINTMENT turned to alarm when he noticed a GAPING hole in the window that normally read "Old Time Food" // and then heard a WHIMPERING // DEEP inside the kitchen.

Mamaebeth said...

1) And then // striking the edge of the GRAND circle // he DISAPPEARED// headfirst // towards the stalls below.

2) Her FIRST thought// curiously// was of AUDEN'S poem //on the fall of Icarus.

3) Gabe walked quickly TOWARDS Jen's diner// hoping to see her serving the last cup of coffee //to the last customer.

4) As he passed under the flashing neon sign of Victor CORONELLI'S bar // he saw that the diner's overheads were OFF// and there was not a SOUL in sight.

5) Gabe's disappointment turned to ALARM //when he noticed a gaping HOLE in the window that normally read "Old Time Food"// and then heard a whimpering //deep inside the kitchen.

Mommy to Ander and Wife to Box said...

1) //And then,// striking the edge of the grand circle,// he disappeared HEADFIRST towards the stalls below.//

2) //Her first thought,// CURIOUSLY,// was of Auden's poem on the fall of Icarus.

3) Gabe walked quickly// towards Jen's diner// hoping to see her serving// the last cup of coffee// to the last customer.

4) As he passed under the flashing neon sign of Victor Coronelli's bar,// he saw that the diner's overheads were OFF and there was not a soul in sight.

5) Gabe's disappointment turned to alarm when he noticed a gaping hole in the window that normally read "Old Time Food"// and THEN heard a whimpering deep inside the kitchen.

Sorry, Paca, but I'm tone deaf even inside my head, apparently. :)

ril said...

1) And THEN, // striking the EDGE of the grand circle, // he disappeared // headfirst // towards the STALLS below.

2) Her FIRST thought, // curiously, // was of Auden's poem // on the FALL of Icarus.

3) Gabe walked QUICKLY towards Jen's diner // hoping to see her serving the LAST cup of coffee to the LAST customer.

4) As he passed under the flashing neon sign of VICTOR CORONELLI's bar, // he saw that the diner's overheads were off and there was not a SOUL in sight.

5) Gabe's DISAPPOINTMENT turned to ALARM when he noticed a GAPING HOLE in the window that NORMALLY read // "Old Time Food" // and then heard a WHIMPERING DEEP inside the kitchen.


Hmm. This was actually pretty tough to do, and I'm still not sure what I've written truly represents the way I internally read it...